Star Wars: The Phantom Menace 'Faster, More Intense'Featured
Fanedits used include:
Hal9000’s 'Cloak of Deception' (primary source)
l8wrtr’s 'Shadow of the Sith' (secondary source)
The Phantom Editor's 'The Phantom Edit' (audio only)
Mike Nichols (The Phantom Editor)
Lucasfilm and Disney
While I tried to improve the storytelling and characterization through editing, I did strive to keep everything relatively 'canonical' so you can watch other Star Wars media like The Clone Wars without skipping a beat.
(2) L8wrtr change
(3) Phantom Editor change
(4) Seciors change
(5) Original change
(I’ve credited changes to Hal if they existed in his edit, even if they appeared in other edits first, since I used his edit as the primary video source for this project.)
- Light film grain added throughout, to counter the overapplication of DVNR on the BluRay source. (1)
- Replaced opening Logos and Fox Fanfare with “Force Awakens” style Lucasfilm Logo cold open. (5)
- New title crawl adapted from Hal9000’s to replace political exposition with menacing villainy (5)
- Removed Viceroy's line justifying his activity, as part of a larger attempt to transform the Neimoidians into more active villains. (1)
- Cut to the Neimoidians after Obi-Wans line "something elsewhere...elusive" to improve pacing and cut down unnecessary information. A new music transition accompanies this. (3)
- Trimmed various clunky or silly Neimoidian dialogue such as, "Are you brain dead?" (2)
- Trimmed Sidious' dialogue, removing concerns over legality. (1)
- Cut instruction for the battle droids to "destroy what's left of" the Jedi. (1)
- Removed all instances of battle droids speaking or gesturing to communicate with one another. They seem to all be on the same 'network.' (1)
- Trimmed Neimoidian cowardice during the fighting (2).
- Trimmed Viceroy's conversation with the Queen via viewscreen to downplay tedious political minutia and portray him as autonomous. (1)
- Removed broken english line "You think she suspect an attack?" (2)
- Cut Qui-Gons exclamation "Battle Droids!" since they had just been fighting Battle Droids (2)
- Cut Obi-Wan's joke about Negotiations (since the setup was cut) (2)
- Trimmed unnecessary dialogue during throne room scene. (1)
- Cut "I will not condone a course of action that will lead us to war" (4) and created a new, longer close up on the Queen using a seamless morph cut transition in Premiere Pro. (5)
- Removed Neimoidians addressing a battle droid as "captain." Again, if they are all on the same network, they would act as one mind. They are not referred to by rank. (1)
- Trimmed Jar Jar's dialogue during his introduction. (1)
- Removed the entire underwater trip to Otah Gungah, along with the tedious Sidious scene caught in the middle. (1)
- Removed scene descending the steps inside the palace discussing political exposition that we get again later. (1)
- Removed alleyway scene where the characters deliver exposition to one another that the audience already knows. Cut a JarJar line in the process. (3)
- Cut Qui-Gon's line that dismisses the battle droids as unimportant. (1)
- Cut "Either choice presents grave danger" "We are brave your highness" It was an awkward exchange (2)
- Tightened Qui-Gon's knock-knock joke with the battle droid, now Qui-Gon cuts the droid off mid-sentence, reminiscent of the "boring conversation anyway" moment in A New Hope (3)
- Removed Jar Jar's antics in the droid bay. Jar Jar throughout is portrayed as more of an everyman than a clown. (1)
- Dialogue trimmed throughout escape from the blockade. (1)
- Removed the Queen personally thanking R2-D2 by name. (1)
- Also removed line "he is to be commended" (5)
- Removed JarJar’s quip about the sun's effect on his skin (2)
- Removed line, "No more commands from her highness today." (1)
- Removed Jar Jar's stepping in poop antic. (1)
- New subtitles with similar dialogue throughout, formatted to match the theatrical version. (1)
- Drastically reduced Jar Jar's antics in Watto's shop. Added noises of him causing a ruckus in the background in order to remove it happen onscreen. (1)
- Removed JarJar going the wrong way out the door (3)
- Trimmed Anakin and Padme's conversation. (1)
- Also removed line about Angels being "the most beeaauuutiful creatures in the universe" (5)
- Removed Watto's line that implies he was immune to the Jedi mind trick merely because of his species. (1)
- Removed several instances of the line, "Yipee" throughout the film by various children. (1)
- Cut down Jarjar's "No again, no again" diatribe but kept joke about them having nothing of value (3)
- Removed Jar Jar's handful of, "Muy muy" lines. (1)
- Removed cartoony sound effect of the frog thing flying through the air as Jar Jar spits it out. (1)
- Trimmed Jar Jar and Anakin during the introduction scene for Sebulba. (1)
- Further removed JarJar's whistling and "acting natural" (5)
- Trimmed Anakin's line as he invites them to his home. (1)
- Trimmed entrance to the Skywalker home, including some of the lines about Threepio. Anakin doesn't state that he is "building" him. A small change, but it allows for the idea that Anakin is merely repairing a previously abandoned Threepio. (1)
- Dinner scene has been trimmed, including mention of slave transmitters, Jar Jar antics with the fruit, and bad child acting. (1)
- Further trimmed bad child acting and JarJar's "moolah" line . (2)
- Removed Padme's line "Well I don't approve" (2)
- Trimmed bad child acting during scene convincing Watto to work a bet with Qui-Gon. (1)
- Trimmed Watto’s dialogue about the ship being a Nubian, since he already said it in a past scene. (4)
- Cut down scene of Anakin and friends working on the pod. (2)
- Removed balcony scene where Qui-Gon checks Anakin's blood. Anakin's racing/"piloting" skills are what prompt Qui-Gon to recruit him, rather than a blood test. (1)
- Cut down but didn't remove JarJar's reaction to Sebulba, who no longer sucks his toes. (5)
- Removed Jar Jar's grin after Qui-Gon tosses the chance cube. (1)
- Cut conversation about Anakin never having won a race. (1)
- Trimmed introduction to the racers to focus on Sebulba and Anakin. (1)
- Further trims to remove visual of Fode and Beed, the podrace announcers. (5)
- Cut Sebulba blowing kisses to the audience. (5)
- Cut pack animal farting in Jar Jar's face. (1)
- Removed Anakin's conversation with his mother, with a new music transition from the flag parade to Sebulba sabotaging Anakin's pod. (3)
- Altered Sebulba and Anakin's conversation to be less juvenile. (1)
- Trimmed podracers' engines startup sequence. (1)
- Cut CGI Jabba the Hutt. (1)
- Two-headed announcer removed throughout, (5) along with various other goofy humor during the podrace. (1)
- Cut Obi-Wans line about “picking up another pathetic life-form”. (2)
- Trimmed bad child acting during scene where Anakin discovers he has been freed. (2)
- Significantly cut down farewell to 3PO. (5)
- Trimmed farewell to Shmi. (1)
- Added deleted probe droid scene to explain why Qui-Gon and Anakin are running to the ship. This scene was color corrected to remove pink tint and better match the surrounding footage. (1)
- Removed Anakin's line, "Qui-Gon, sir, wait, I'm tired!" (1)
- Cut Qui-Gon's line, "Tell them to take off!" Anakin doesn't tell them anyway. (1)
- Cut Anakin's interjection "What are we gonna do about it!" and Qui-Gon's response. (2)
- Removed scene on Naboo where the Viceroy sits on his walking throne because it references the excised underwater trip to Otah Gungah. (1)
- Lessened Jar Jar's presence in the scene between Anakin and Padme en route to Coruscant.(1)
- Slightly trimmed Padme’s explanation to Anakin about the Queen’s worries. Kept necklace. (5)
- Cut out “the entire planet is one big city” line (1)
- Removed Padme calling for Anakin on the landing platform. (1)
- Removed Anakin's unassured statement about hopefully starting his training. (1)
- The Senate scene begins with the Queen's address. (3)
- Removed a reference during the Senate scene to the taxation of trade routes, to comply with the revised opening of the film. (1)
- Cut Anakin's verbal reactions during the scene where the council tests him. Reused and shifted footage to give him more facial reactions. (3)
- Removed dialogue about Anakin being too old to be trained (1)
- Cut dialogue about the Jedi Code forbidding more than one apprentice. (1)
- Removed line, "This may be the clue we need to unravel the mystery of the Sith." This is never expounded upon. (1)
- Removed all references to Midichlorians. (1)
- Removed scene where Obi-Wan apologizes to Qui-Gon and Jar Jar emerges from the swamp. (1)
- Trimmed scene between the Naboo and Boss Nass, including Jar Jar's hesitancy and cowering. (1)
- Further trims to remove Boss Nass's blubbering and awkward vocalizations. (5)
- Removed JarJar's promotion to general with no qualifications. (3)
- Trimmed the battle planning scene, making Padmé less verbose. (1)
- Significantly reduced Jar Jar's antics throughout the battle, though he does appear during each Gungan battle sequence because he is the audience's only anchor. (5)
- Replaced Padme's line "get to your ships" with a more natural version delivered by Natalie Portman in one of the trailers. (3)
- Anakin gets into a cockpit and leaps into action in order to help the Queen, and intentionally flies up into the space battle. (1)
- Removed grappling gun sequence. (2)
- Battle sequences restructured slightly to allow for Anakin to save the day rather than Padme. Originally, Anakin's actions were redundant after Padme captured the Viceroy. (2)
- Trimmed most of Anakin's dialogue in space and some other bits here and there. (2)
- Obi-Wan now leaps at Maul much more quickly, giving him less time to react. (2)
- Qui-Gon's last words are trimmed to remove heavy-handed request for Obi-Wan to train Anakin, allowing Obi-Wan to "take it upon [him]self to train [Anakin] as a Jedi." (1)
- Trimmed Obi-Wan's conversation with Yoda to imply that Obi-Wan wants to train Anakin himself, rather than to fulfill a promise to Qui-Gon. (1)
- Trimmed the final celebration scene slightly. (1)
- Reordered some of the final shots of the film so that Padme smiles at Anakin, he smiles back and then Obi-Wan looks away worriedly, foreshadowing the events of Episode II. (5)
I may be going against the crowd a bit here, but I'm sorry to say that for me this isn't "it". Although in many ways this is a great edit, just like other edits of EP1 I feel that there are pros and cons to watching one or the other. Certainly the editor has made an excellent effort in trying to combine the best parts of many different cuts (although I have not seen all of his sources), but, in my opinion, there is still room for improvement. Part of that is just personal preference; as I'm sure most would agree, even though 90% of fans universally concur on most things about the prequels (eg. Gungan racism is acceptable racism), we all probably differ slightly on other things, and therefore have different ideas on what our ultimate cut would be. Here are a few of my quibbles, some just personal:
- I believe sistros has also mentioned this, but Amidala's confrontation with the Viceroy after being captured is certainly quite jarring when we cut back to them, finding that the droids are automatically defeated.
- Although cutting the underwater scene with the Gungans was well done, I think that without it the army suddenly deciding to help them after a short plea comes across as a little bit of a Dues Ex Machina.
- I can't quite put my finger on what this is down to, but I really enjoyed L8wrtr's cut of the podrace, whereas I felt that this one dragged somewhat. It could just be that I was irritated by Jar Jars intermittent exclamations.
- This is half positive and half negative, and in no way something I blame the editor for: I really didn't realise how much I hated Jar Jar until I watched this, partly because other editors are quite gun-ho when cutting him out. So I really wish there could have been a lot less of him, but at the same time, I think the editor was wise to keep him in, and for just the right amount. Doing so allowed him to be established as a character and therefore make it less strange that this creature follows them around for the whole movie. The fact of the matter is that Jar Jar is a main character and unfortunately plays an integral part in the story. You have to choose between eliminating the most annoying character in the movie and sacrificing the narrative, or keeping him in, but giving the story a more cohesive flow. It drove me nuts, but I believe the editor made a wise choice. A good edit should be an edit that someone who's never seen the film before can watch and follow without any WTH moments.
- My only comment on the editing, which for the most part was superb, is there were I believe maybe a handful (if that) of what I would consider to be "obvious" cuts, some of which were made more noticable by a change in volume level.
- Finally, I would personally have left the celebration at the end. I think it's better to end on the "but who was defeated? Master or the apprentice?" scene.
A side note regarding some edits: There's a deleted scene in which Qui-gon encounters one of Darth Maul's probe droids. Some editors choose to insert this scene, and I'm glad they do as the film is better for it. However, it really bothers me that the transition is always noticeable due to the fact that the colours are different. I'm not sure how much can be done about this, but it honestly would be made so much better if some colour correction could be used so that it syncs up better with the rest of the movie.
I feel I have been chiefly negative, so I'd like to close on a high note. Despite this not being my go to version of this film, it really is a very good edit. Certainly one of the slickest I've come across. If I'm familiar with a film, I sometimes can't tell if the cut is bad, or if I'm just not used to a scene being absent, but with this I often noticed when something was missing and yet it still felt very natural (I would often nod to myself in silent approval).
I would also just like to say well done, Octoroxx, and thank you for making this available (and the same for those whose work laid the foundation). You clearly put a lot of work into this and it seems a lot of people consider this to be their definitive Episode I; it's easy to see why since the edit is of high quality and many sensible decisions were made in favour of both the pacing and the narrative. This is certainly an edit that I would recommend and I look forward to viewing your work on episodes II and III!
Best PM edit, hands down. You've truly achieved your goal of taking the best ideas from some of the best edits around. Serious kudos to all of the fan-editors who put in such great work, and to octoroxx for giving us this.
This is a great edit! All that needs to be there (to make a decent, cohesive movie) is there. All of the fat has been trimmed. The movie no longer taps the brakes any more, now it fearlessly moves forward. Sure, Jar Jar's still there, but he doesn't annoy the viewer (nearly as much anyway, I still hate having to look at him). I have to say, the editor made some wise decisions.
Highly recommended. Very good work!
This is the best edit I've seen so far of EP I. I absolutely recommend it =). You were able to bring out the best of all the other edits (my congrats to the other editors, which I esteem and like their works as well).
- The senate audition should have remained untouched because the original is very good, more formal and bureaucratic, further demonstrating the corruption and stalling of the senate's bureaucrats and would avoid that in one frame we see Mas Amedda and Sei Taria seated and suddenly in the next frame Amidala appears (too fast) and they are on their feet.
- You should have left Amidala's confrontation with Nute Gunray untouched. When we see them again Amidala and their soldiers suddenly defeated the droids. It was trimmed too much, I think.
The rest is perfect. Unless Adywan comes up with something better, this will be my "how it should be" version of EP I. =)
Good work friend =).
The best Episode 1 edit I've seen.
I had previously attempted to do this very thing, as I could not choose between the work of Hal9000, L8WRTR, and Q2. I was pretty happy with what I had, but octoroxx has done what I tried, only better. This edit combines all the best ideas already out there, with a few new changes by octoroxx.
Definitely my new go-to for The Phantom Menace.