Star Wars: Episode I - Cloak Of Deception
- NTSC DVD-5
- Blu-Ray (BD-25)
Alternate audio (No Additional Podrace Music)
Subtitles (English & French) available here: https://mega.nz/#!EQ9z1TBK!eLXRVVVODg3Z5HJHhCaeQvAsppRH8q7vrRMto6D_vr4
1) Bend the prequels to the story continuity of the original trilogy and the impressions it gives.
2) Improve the prequels in and of themselves, as films, through conventional 'FanFix' methodology. The pacing is improved, dialogue trimmed, and characters are developed better. This is the most readily apparent of these three goals that can be seen in The Phantom Edit, for example. The edits should be viable as films on their own.
3) They ought to be functional as replacements for the original versions. This means leaving the film's thoroughly "prequel" nature unaltered, respecting the broad strokes of Star Wars orthodoxy, and avoiding making changes that would betray to the audience that they're watching a fan edit. In other words, none of the other two listed goals should put undue stress on the goal of producing something that would have been suitable to have been released in 1999.
New title crawl to replace political exposition with menacing villainy, courtesy of Smudger9.
Removed Viceroy's line justifying his activity, as part of a larger attempt to transform the Neimoidians into more active villains.
Cut Qui-Gon's line about 'Federation types' being cowards
Trimmed Neimoidian dialogue such as, "Are you brain dead?"
Removed Viceroy's hesitancy to invade Naboo.
Trimmed Sidious' dialogue, removing concerns over legality.
Cut instruction for the battle droids to "destroy what's left of" the Jedi.
Removed all instances of battle droids speaking or gesturing to communicate with one another. They seem to all be on the same 'network.'
Trimmed Neimoidian cowardice during the fighting.
Trimmed Viceroy's conversation with the Queen via viewscreen to downplay tedious political minutia and portray him as autonomous.
Trimmed unnecessary dialogue during throne room scene.
Removed Neimoidians addressing a battle droid as "captain." Again, if they are all on the same network, they would act as one mind. They are not referred to by rank.
Trimmed Jar Jar's dialogue during his introduction.
Removed the entire underwater trip to Otah Gungah, along with the tedious Sidious scene caught in the middle.
Removed scene descending the steps inside the palace discussing political exposition that we get again later.
Cut Qui-Gon's line that dismisses the battle droids as unimportant.
Tightened Qui-Gon's knock-knock joke with the battle droid, though kept some of the whimsy.
Removed Jar Jar's antics in the droid bay. Jar Jar throughout is portrayed as more of an everyman than a clown.
Dialogue trimmed throughout escape from the blockade.
Removed the Queen personally thanking R2-D2 by name.
Removed line, "No more commands from her highness today."
Removed Jar Jar's stepping in poop antic.
New subtitles with similar dialogue throughout, formatted to match the theatrical version.
Drastically reduced Jar Jar's antics in Watto's shop. Added noises of him causing a ruckus in the background in order to remove it happen onscreen.
Trimmed Anakin and Padme's conversation.
Removed Watto's line that implies he was immune to the Jedi mind trick merely because of his species.
Removed several instances of the line, "Yipee" throughout the film by various children.
Removed Jar Jar's handful of, "Muy muy" lines.
Removed cartoony sound effect of the frog thing flying through the air as Jar Jar spits it out.
Trimmed Jar Jar and Anakin during the introduction scene for Sebulba.
Trimmed Anakin's line as he invites them to his home.
Trimmed entrance to the Skywalker home, including some of the lines about Threepio. Anakin doesn't state that he is "building" him. A small change, but it allows for the idea that Anakin is merely repairing a previously abandoned Threepio.
Dinner scene has been trimmed, including mention of slave transmitters, Jar Jar antics with the fruit, and bad child acting.
Trimmed bad child acting during scene convincing Watto to work a bet with Qui-Gon.
Removed scene after Qui-Gon and Schmi's conversation with Anakin working on his pod, taking the annoying kids with it.
Removed balcony scene where Qui-Gon checks Anakin's blood. Anakin's racing/"piloting" skills are what prompt Qui-Gon to recruit him, rather than a blood test.
Added trimmed version of the deleted scene "Dawn Before the Race" to help fill out the shortened film and make up for removing audience exposure to Anakin's pod in prior scene.
Removed Jar Jar's grin after Qui-Gon tosses the chance cube.
Cut conversation about Anakin never having won a race.
Trimmed introduction to the racers to focus on Sebulba and Anakin.
Cut pack animal farting in Jar Jar's face (and in most of the audio channels, I'd point out).
Altered Sebulba and Anakin's conversation to be less juvenile.
Trimmed podracers' engines startup sequece.
Musical score added to the podrace from the 'Shadows of the Empire' soundtrack and from 'A New Hope.' Podrace edited to accommodate new music.
Two-headed announcer trimmed throughout, along with various other things during the podrace.
Trimmed bad child acting during scene where Anakin discovers he has been freed.
Trimmed farewell to Schmi.
Added deleted probe droid scene to explain why Qui-Gon and Anakin are running to the ship. This scene was color corrected to remove pink tint and better match the surrounding footage.
Removed Anakin's line, "Qui-Gon, sir, wait, I'm tired!"
Cut Qui-Gon's line, "Tell them to take off!" Anakin doesn't tell them anyway.
Removed scene on Naboo where the Viceroy sits on his walking throne because it references the excised underwater trip to Otah Gungah.
Lessened Jar Jar's presence in the scene between Anakin and Padme en route to Coruscant.
Removed Anakin giving Padmé a necklace, because it has no payoff in my version of Episode III.
Trimmed Ric Olie's dialogue upon arrival at Coruscant.
Removed Padme calling for Anakin on the landing platform.
Removed Anakin's unassured statement about hopefully starting his training.
Removed a reference during the Senate scene to the taxation of trade routes, to comply with the revised opening of the film.
Removed dialogue about Anakin being too old to be trained. Throughout these edits, the implication that all Jedi begin their training as children is removed.
Cut dialogue about the Jedi Code forbidding more than one apprentice.
Removed line, "This may be the clue we need to unravel the mystery of the Sith." This is never expounded upon.
Removed all references to midichlorians.
Removed scene where Obi-Wan apologizes to Qui-Gon and Jar Jar emerges from the swamp.
Trimmed scene between the Naboo and Boss Nass, including Jar Jar's hesitancy and cowering.
Trimmed the battle planning scene, making Padmé less verbose.
Reduced Jar Jar's antics throughout the battle, though he does appear during each Gungun battle sequence because he is the audience's only anchor.
Anakin gets into a cockpit and leaps into action in order to help the Queen, and intentionally flies up into the space battle.
Battle sequences restructured slightly to allow for Anakin to save the day rather than Padme. Originally, Anakin's actions were redundant after Padme captured the Viceroy.
Qui-Gon's last words are trimmed to remove heavy-handed request for Obi-Wan to train Anakin, allowing Obi-Wan to "take it upon [him]self to train [Anakin] as a Jedi."
Trimmed Obi-Wan's conversation with Yoda to imply that Obi-Wan wants to train Anakin himself, rather than to fulfill a promise to Qui-Gon.
Trimmed the final celebration scene slightly.
Added credits for myself, workprint viewers, contributors, and acknowledgments of all other TPM "FanFix" fan edits to date.
I have never been a big fan of the Phantom Menace. I always found it boring and obnoxious. Hal9000 manages to make it a decent movie for me. With Jar Jar toned down, the character of Anakin improved and political confusion removed, this now makes for a fun and fast paced flick. I really appreciate Hal's approach here. Most people would just cut out literally everything that displeases them but every edit/cut that Hal made was to make for a better film. An example of this is with Jar Jar. Most faneditors wish to remove basically everything that comes out of his mouth. This results in an issue, which is that Jar Jar becomes some random character who for some reason is following everyone around. Hal masterfully refines his character to be an actually likable character who ends up wanting to truly help the cause. All in all, this is a wonderful piece of work which never feels like a fan edit and improves immensely upon it's source material.
First of all I wanna say thank you to Hal9000 for making this edit. I watched version 4.1 of this edit. The visual/audio editing is seamless and perfect throughout the movie, I have nothing to criticize on that front for sure! Great job, you work really well :)
I have to say, after watching this edit, I think this movie really is unsalvageable. It's riddled with exposition, plot contrivances, and cheesy scenes no matter what you do with it. This is a brilliant effort though, and renders at least 50% of the movie somewhat decent.
I disagree wholeheartedly with any changes to the podrace. I think the way the podrace is presented in the original cut, bar the annoying "yippees!" being thrown around, is perfect as it is and shouldn't be changed. In this cut, the lack of build-up/anticipation at the beginning of the podrace kinda makes it start too soon (much is riding on this race), and end too soon as well. We are brought to the arena, boom the podrace starts, and then it's over too quickly as well since some of the victory shots have been cut too. Overall, I think the podrace should be brought back to its default state bar the "yippees!"
A lot is cut in favor of making this a better movie, but it creates a movie that's just too fast-paced as a result. We're being thrown around from place to place without any time to breath, at least most of the time. Generally, it works, but it's still too fast.
Qui-Gon's character really feels like he's dumb in this. Not sure if it was the same way in the original movie but he comes out as very selfish in this one, and kind of being the cause of some of their problems because of his stubbornness. Much of his "warm father-figure" dialogue to Anakin has been removed (some for very good reasons :P), but that leaves him a bit cold and short-sighted. Don't know if that was intended.
The deleted scenes were overall inserted well enough, although the one with Padme and the Speeder really stood out like a sore thumb to me. It feels pointless.
Anakin as a character feels MUCH better in this movie than the original, I really felt like his arc and motivations worked. His mother came out as pretty stupid though, since most of her scenes in the house have been cut. She kinda just "goes with it", and it doesn't really work in my opinion.
Anyway, I have to say that hal9000 did a good job, all things considered, his editing skills are top-notch, it's just the movie I think that doesn't really work on a very basic level!
Still, recommended because it's shorter than the original :)
Editing was excellent. never really noticed the editing. Loved the trimmed down, streamlined version. much more exciting, much more tolerable and coherent- it was much easier to understand the political plotlines going on than in the original. I appreciated that so much of the awful dialogue was scrapped, particularly by you know who, but also appreciated the abbreviated pod race and other scenes. I did missed the big fish, but get that it took away from the plot. Ultimately, I think this was about as good as could be hoped for. so much potential in a movie that underutilized its actors in favor of special effects. not ready to write this in as my definitive edition, as i'd like to see a couple of the other edits, but so far- it's #1.
Additional Edits on my Wish List:
* changing Jar Jar binks voice to some tough sounding alien voice w/ subtitles. also love that I heard that some edits made him into a bad-ass.
* do the same thing- insert an alien sounding language- for the "Asian" Trade Federation leaders.
* edit out Anakin asking padme, "are you an angel?"
* edit out old woman saying "storm is coming"
* edit out Anakin declaring, "mom, i'm home!"
* edit out R2D2's "award ceremony"
* edited out Soboba sabotaging Anakin's pod racer. it feels contrived- why would he feel threatened by him and furthermore, I think it would have been just as or more tense if it was understood that Anakin whipped it up to have ready for the race, and did not have time to fully complete it, thus- weakened parts (much like the bicycle malfunction in "Breaking Away"- if anyone's seen that movie)
Very well done edit. You forget you are actually watching an edit except when the deleted scenes are added because they're so low res but that's it.
I don't necessarily agree with all the cuts but they work very well. The ending battles / climax are particularly improved. Can't wait to see v4.
Other than the original Phantom Edit, this is the first TPM edit I've watched...and I dug it!
Started strong and finished strong. The middle was hit/miss for me. There were certainly parts cut that I would've liked to remain and parts that remained that I would've liked to go...but I imagine that's how it is with any fan edit of a movie you're a fan of. I definitely missed the trip to Otoh Gunga though it was interesting to see an attempt at making the Jedi appear to know where they were going.
My favorite edit (decision and execution) was Anakin intentionally taking a ship to join the fight. I don't know if that concept originated with this edit (as there are so many) but it was just brilliant!
On to watch your versions of Episodes II & III...