Star Wars: Episode I - Cloak Of DeceptionHot
- NTSC DVD-5
- Blu-Ray (BD-25)
Fan editor’s commentary track
Subtitles in English, Spanish, and French
1) Bend the prequels to the story continuity of the original trilogy and the impressions it gives.
2) Improve the prequels in and of themselves, as films, through conventional 'FanFix' methodology. The pacing is improved, dialogue trimmed, and characters are developed better. This is the most readily apparent of these three goals that can be seen in The Phantom Edit, for example. The edits should be viable as films on their own.
3) They ought to be functional as replacements for the original versions. This means leaving the film's thoroughly "prequel" nature unaltered, respecting the broad strokes of Star Wars orthodoxy, and avoiding making changes that would betray to the audience that they're watching a fan edit. In other words, none of the other two listed goals should put undue stress on the goal of producing something that would have been suitable to have been released in 1999.
Light film grain added throughout, to counter the overapplication of DVNR on the BluRay source.
New title crawl, courtesy of Sir Ridley
Trimmed Neimoidian dialogue such as, "Are you brain dead?"
Cut instruction for the battle droids to "destroy what's left of" the Jedi.
Removed all instances of battle droids speaking or gesturing to communicate with one another. They seem to all be on the same 'network.'
Trimmed Neimoidian cowardice during the fighting.
Trimmed Viceroy's conversation with the Queen via viewscreen to downplay tedious political minutia and portray him as autonomous.
Trimmed unnecessary dialogue during throne room scene.
Trimmed Jar Jar's dialogue during his introduction.
Removed the entire underwater trip to Otah Gungah, along with the tedious Sidious scene caught in the middle.
Removed scene descending the steps inside the palace discussing political exposition that we get again later.
Cut Qui-Gon's line that dismisses the battle droids as unimportant.
Tightened Qui-Gon's knock-knock joke with the battle droid, though kept some of the whimsy.
Removed Jar Jar's antics in the droid bay. Jar Jar throughout is portrayed as more of an everyman than a clown.
Dialogue trimmed throughout escape from the blockade.
Removed the Queen personally thanking R2-D2 by name.
Removed line, "No more commands from her highness today."
Removed Jar Jar's stepping in poop antic.
New subtitles with similar dialogue throughout, formatted to match the theatrical version.
Drastically reduced Jar Jar's antics in Watto's shop. Added noises of him causing a ruckus in the background in order to remove it happen onscreen.
Trimmed Anakin and Padme's conversation.
Removed Watto's line that implies he was immune to the Jedi mind trick merely because of his species.
Removed several instances of the line, "Yipee" throughout the film by various children.
Removed Jar Jar's handful of, "Muy muy" lines.
Removed cartoony sound effect of the frog thing flying through the air as Jar Jar spits it out.
Trimmed Jar Jar and Anakin during the introduction scene for Sebulba.
Trimmed Anakin's line as he invites them to his home.
Trimmed entrance to the Skywalker home, including some of the lines about Threepio. Anakin doesn't state that he is "building" him. A small change, but it allows for the idea that Anakin is merely repairing a previously abandoned Threepio.
*New line of dialogue for 3PO gently implies a backstory, culled from ‘The Clone Wars.’
Dinner scene has been trimmed, including mention of slave transmitters, Jar Jar antics with the fruit, and bad child acting.
*Jar Jar using his tongue to eat apples has been reinstated.
*Anakin defending himself about Watto’s old pod reinstated, including reference to Sebulba flashing him with his vents.
*Reinstated a trimmed version of Anakin working on the pod after Qui-Gon and Schmi’s conversation.
Removed balcony scene where Qui-Gon checks Anakin's blood. Anakin's racing/"piloting" skills are what prompt Qui-Gon to recruit him, rather than a blood test.
*V6 removes the deleted scene previously added for pacing reasons, ‘Dawn Before the Race.’
Removed Jar Jar's grin after Qui-Gon tosses the chance cube.
Cut conversation about Anakin never having won a race.
*A new line of dialogue from 3PO removes the implication that he has never traveled in space, for consistency with a prior V6 change.
Trimmed introduction to the racers to focus on Sebulba and Anakin.
Cut pack animal farting in Jar Jar's face (and in most of the audio channels, I'd point out).
Altered Sebulba and Anakin's conversation to be less juvenile.
Trimmed podracers' engines startup sequece.
*Removed previously added musical score to the podrace from the 'Shadows of the Empire' soundtrack and from 'A New Hope.'
Two-headed announcer trimmed throughout, along with various other things during the podrace. The sequence overall is similar to the theatrical, pre-DVD version.
*Reinstated a deleted scene snippet where Sebulba attempts to flash Anakin with his vents.
Trimmed bad child acting during scene where Anakin discovers he has been freed.
Trimmed farewell to Schmi.
Added deleted probe droid scene to explain why Qui-Gon and Anakin are running to the ship. This scene was color corrected to remove pink tint and better match the surrounding footage.
Removed Anakin's line, "Qui-Gon, sir, wait, I'm tired!"
Cut Qui-Gon's line, "Tell them to take off!" Anakin doesn't tell them anyway.
Removed scene on Naboo where the Viceroy sits on his walking throne because it references the excised underwater trip to Otah Gungah.
Lessened Jar Jar's presence in the scene between Anakin and Padme en route to Coruscant.
Removed Padme calling for Anakin on the landing platform.
Removed Anakin's unassured statement about hopefully starting his training.
Removed a reference during the Senate scene to the taxation of trade routes, to comply with the revised opening of the film.
Removed dialogue about Anakin being too old to be trained. Throughout these edits, the implication that all Jedi begin their training as children is removed.
*Reinstated dialogue about the Jedi Code forbidding more than one apprentice.
Removed line, "This may be the clue we need to unravel the mystery of the Sith." This is never expounded upon.
Removed all references to midichlorians.
Removed scene where Obi-Wan apologizes to Qui-Gon and Jar Jar emerges from the swamp.
*Added line, “When in trouble, Gungans go to sacred place,” as Jar Jar leads the company there. (idea from MaláStrana)
Trimmed scene between the Naboo and Boss Nass, including Jar Jar's hesitancy and cowering.
Trimmed the battle planning scene, making Padmé less verbose.
Reduced Jar Jar's antics throughout the battle, though he does appear during each Gungun battle sequence because he is the audience's only anchor.
Anakin gets into a cockpit and leaps into action in order to help the Queen, and intentionally flies up into the space battle.
*Reinstated a few snippets of Anakin within the Naboo starfighter.
Battle sequences restructured slightly to allow for Anakin to save the day rather than Padme. Originally, Anakin's actions were redundant after Padme captured the Viceroy.
Qui-Gon's last words are trimmed to remove heavy-handed request for Obi-Wan to train Anakin, allowing Obi-Wan to "take it upon [him]self to train [Anakin] as a Jedi."
Trimmed Obi-Wan's conversation with Yoda to imply that Obi-Wan wants to train Anakin himself, rather than to fulfill a promise to Qui-Gon.
Added credits for myself, workprint viewers, contributors, and acknowledgments of all other TPM "FanFix" fan edits to date.
This edit greatly improved this movie, it went from being a pile of garbage that I hated to a movie that I can enjoy. Sure it is not perfect, Jar Jar is still in here but most of his scenes were he is being annoying are cut. There is only one Jar Jar scene that I think could've have been cut but wasn't which is when he zaps his tongue in the pod. The video quality was great as well, how ever in one or two scenes it did seem to notice a small dip in quality. The narrative was improved as well by cutting out unnecessary dialogue and some scenes in general. However at the end of the film it might confuse new viewers where Padmé gets help from the Gungans, this is my only complaint with the narrative and it is minor. The editing was very well done it did not seem as if I was watching a fan edit. However this edit can only do so much in fixing this movie, for example the acting is still not so great and the cgi was not that well. This along with Jar Jar is why I gave it a 9 not a 10.
This edit actually allows me to enjoy this movie, something that I could only do to make fun of in the past. This is how I will be watching the Phantom Menace from now on.
First of all I'd like to say that TPM was always my least favorite Star Wars movie, so it was the one I was looking for a fanedit the most. Lukcily it's probably the most fanedited movie of all time so that wasn't too hard. What WAS hard, however, was finding the right cut. And Hal's "Cloak Of Deception" fills those shoes nicely.
Most prequel fanedits end up taking away too much for my taste, which hurts them both narratively and technically. Hal's V5 doesn't suffer with said problems: nothing is taken out of the movie without a purpose, and 99% of the cuts were incredibly seamless, not giving away that you're watching a fanedit. Therefore, technically it's an almost perfect fanedit.
Most of what was cut here is what originally was the first act of TPM. That way, the trip to Naboo serves only to kickstart the journey of our heroes in a somewhat similar way to the first sequence in the original Star Wars, or the first sequence in a James Bond movie. It also gets us to Anakin much faster, but the edit doesn't go out of its way to make him the protagonist. The film's still much tighter and more focused though, so there's definitely a lot of improvement to his character and to how he relates to others. Qui-Gon's still the main protagonist I'd say, but the movie's not as convoluted and complicated like it was originally, which in other words mean the plot was vastly improved.
However, two moments that still take me out of the movie come to mind, but they're extremely minor: the exclusion of Gunga City, and the added deleted scene "Dawn Before the Race". The deleted scene's issue is quality, as it's clearly SD quality alongside a very high quality 1080p video for the rest of the edit, but it's not that big of a deal. It's probably not as much of an issue with the more compressed versions too. I would, however, prefer something like L8wrtr's version of the scene that this deleted scene is substituting. But it's fine. The exclusion of Gunga City doesn't hurt the narrative in any way, mind you, the only very minor complaint I have of it is that it's the only time where something was cut and I was able to notice. Maybe it's becasue I knew what was going to happen beforehand, but there's still room from improvement there.
Overall though, Cloak Of Deception clocks in at 1h49min, which is appropriate to me. Many fanedits end at something below 1h40, and I feel like pace in those cuts is just too fast. Hal's never gets boring at any moment, cuts out everything cheesy and stupid, while still maintaining the TPM spirit, but only the good stuff. I'd change almost nothing from this, and it's definitely replaced the original when I rewatch the PT. Strongly recommend.
Holy shit. This is surprisingly good. (Not amazing, but really good. It's now a decent and watchable movie.) I've always hated all those silly childish jokes. There were just too many of them. You accomplished to make Jar Jar and young Anakin much more likeable and deeper characters. Especially Jar Jar now seems like a funny person and not a clumsy idiot. Thumbs up for the podrace and the final battle. It was very enjoying to watch.
Pros: This edit takes a moderate approach, leaving the TPM story basically intact. The editing quality is overall pretty good, though a couple of the added SD scenes are glaring reminders that this is a fan edit.
Cons: In general, the cuts made it harder for me to care about the story. Cuts to the opening chapter in particular make it hard to get attached to the Jedi so that I found myself indifferent to the outcome of the lightsaber fight at the end. I've always felt the pod race is long and boring, but because the build-up to this shorter pod race was so quick, it was hard to get emotionally invested. The added music felt a bit manipulative to me because the story didn't move me.
I really enjoyed watching this edit, didn't hate the episode I original as all others because it was the first movie I saw and I entered the star wars universe through this movie.
But this edit removes some of the childish and annoying things and makes the movie flow more gentle across without removing the story.
This is my favorite way of watching episode I as of now.