Star Wars: Episode II - The Approaching StormHot
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1) Bend the prequels to the story continuity of the original trilogy and the impressions it gives.
2) Improve the prequels in and of themselves, as films, through conventional 'FanFix' methodology. The pacing is improved, dialogue trimmed, and characters are developed better. This is the most readily apparent of these three goals that can be seen in The Phantom Edit, for example. The edits should be viable as films on their own.
3) They ought to be functional as replacements for the original versions. This means leaving the film's thoroughly "prequel" nature unaltered, respecting the broad strokes of Star Wars orthodoxy, and avoiding making changes that would betray to the audience that they're watching a fan edit. In other words, none of the other two listed goals should put undue stress on the goal of producing something that would have been suitable to have been released in 2002.
The primary source material is a preservation of the HDTV version by OT.com user Schorman.
New title crawl, courtesy of Sir Ridley.
Camera pans down, rather than up, after the crawl, to maintain continuity with the other five films.
Removed Captain Typho's lines before the ship blows up.
Trimmed Corde's death.
Added deleted scene where Padme addresses the Senate. This establishes some context for the political content of this film, as well as Padme's post-Queen character.
Trimmed the scene in Palpatine's office to remove unhelpful dialogue.
*Reinstated Jar Jar greeting Obi-Wan and Anakin at the elevator
Anakin's inappropriate compliments are trimmed in favor of making it a relatable awkward moment for him. It doesn't give Padme pause.
In the interest of downplaying Obi-Wan and Anakin's antagonism, their discussion about their roles in front of Padme is trimmed to get to the point.
Anakin does not talk to Jar Jar.
Removed Jango talking to Zam, to save his reveal for later and remove redundancy.
Removed scene where Obi-Wan and Anakin merely bicker.
Tightened Padme's reaction to Anakin slicing the poison slugs.
Tightened up the speeder chase to remove overly dumb moments, dialogue, and physics.
Anakin doesn't lose his lightsaber, and Obi-Wan doesn't lecture him about it.
Cut Windu's instructions to Anakin. It's more effective characterization if Anakin decides to talk to Palpatine himself.
*Reinstated Jar Jar being given responsibilities as Padme prepares to leave.
Removed Anakin complaining about Obi-Wan to Padme. Padme consoles him, and they acknowledge that Anakin has grown up. Padme's only initial barrier to him has been dissolved.
*Reinstated the original ending to the packing scene
*Reinstated a truncated version of the Dex’s Diner scene
*Added two lines of dialogue from the removed scene where Anakin and Padme meet with the Queen to the refugee transport scene
Anakin doesn't mention attachment being forbidden. This on its own doesn't change anything drastically, but it's not necessary to define the universal 'Jedi Way' so narrowly.
Added deleted scene where Obi-Wan and Mace talk on the landing platform.
Used extended arrival scene on Naboo.
Added first deleted scene of Padme with her family, replacing conversation with the new Queen.
Removed Kaminoan prime minister listing numbers of clone units. It lessens the power of their reveal in a few scenes.
Boba Fett is not described as being a clone. He probably still is a clone, but the pacing is off when the movie pauses to talk about him when nobody asked.
No fireplace scene. Instead, we have a sunset kiss that is interrupted by a scene transition. Scene has been regraded by NeverarGreat.
Trimmed Obi-Wan and Jango's dialogue.
When Obi-Wan reports to Yoda and Windu, removed Windu's perspective-less question about the assassination attempt.
Removed dialogue about the Jedi not being able to use the force due to the dark side clouding everything.
Lightly trimmed the fight in the rain.
Tightened up the chase through the rings of Geonosis. Removed childish Boba moments, and sped up the pacing.
Removed Threepio recognizing Anakin as "the maker."
Trimmed Cliegg Lars' dialogue that goes over the top to characterize him as a good guy.
*Removed dialogue between Anakin and Padme as he plans to search for his mother
Removed scene where Yoda senses Anakin's pain.
Removed Separatists' walking conversation with Dooku, including the reveal that Padme's assassination attempts stem from Nute Gunray's pettiness.
*Undid the change from Dooku talking about “ten thousand” systems to “a thousand”
Obi-Wan identifies Count Dooku as the mastermind of the assassination attempt, rather than Nute Gunray.
*Replaced 3PO’s line about never having flown before, in order to complement a change made in ‘Cloak of Deception’ which gently implies a backstory for his character
Trimmed dialogue as Palpatine and company discuss what to do.
Jar Jar doesn't fumble his words as he proposes giving Palpatine emergency powers. He also doesn't seem caught by surprise when his colleagues applaud him. He appears more competent.
*Reinstated Yoda hinting that he is going to visit Kamino
Threepio and Artoo stay on the ship and do not make their way into the battle.
*Reinstated a truncated version of the droid factory sequence, though retained the deleted scene where Padme speaks with Dooku (FX of Anakin deactivating his now non-broken lightsaber courtesy of Sir Ridley)
Trimmed love confession scene to remove Anakin's surprised reaction, because they had not decided not to get together.
Trimmed Nute Gunray's dialogue during the Gladiator sequence.
Removed Threepio and Artoo from the battle, as well as trimming it up slightly.
Removed Geonosian war room sequences in order to remove the unnecessary Death Star cameo.
Lessened Obi-Wan and Anakin's antagonism after Padme falls out of the transport.
Removed the Jedi giving the clones military advice; this helps establish the clones as competent soldiers and the Jedi as being dependent upon them.
Trimmed the duel with Dooku.
*Removed an odd two-second shot of Anakin in pain prior to seeing Padme laying in the sand
Yoda does not take out a lightsaber. I borrowed one brief shot from L8wrtr's edit.
When AOTC first came out, I read somewhere that reversing the audio of Dooku's pilot droid sounds like, "Use the Force, idiot."
Sidious does not address Dooku as 'Tyrannus,' and that title has been removed from the film.
Added credits for myself, workprint viewers, contributors, and acknowledgments of all other AOTC "FanFix" fan edits to date.
So... I've always had a soft spot for AotC. It's just a movie that entertain me a lot. What I didn't know before watching Hal's edit, however, is how much more I could enjoy myself while watching it.
We start off with an infinitely better opening crawl, making the political trama much clearer and easier to understand. Hal also added a very powerful deleted scene of Padme addressing the Senate, which I now think is fundamental to this movie, the scene alone already making watching this fanedit worth it.
The relationship between Obi-Wan and Anakin is also vastly improved. We still get to see that they're somewhat antagonistic towards one another because they're relationship is probably quite worn out, but we don't get too much bickering because heck, they're good friends.
Only gripe I have with this fanedit is the deletion of Dex's Diner Scene. I'm probably the only one with this complaint, but I just like seeing how Obi-Wan's friends with all kinds of people, I also like how it adds to the "Detective Obi-Wan" part of the plot, and I like it as world building too, making Coruscant feel more real. It's also somewhat of a callback to American Graffiti, so much appreciated.
The romance subplot is masterfully improved, making it as close to 100% believable that they'd fall in love as possible.
I really wouldn't change almost anything with this. Just really well done. Definitely recommend.
Entertaining, fun, realistically romantic, fixes most of the problems Anakin has, which is very hard to do, especially taking into account the terrible performance of Christiansen. It makes the movie more focused, straightforward and action-packed.
After watching this I must say I'm a huge fan of your work. The main thing that bothered me in the original version was the relationship between Anakin and Padmé. Thanks to your edit it actually works and isn't cringy at all. I appreciate you used some cutscenes, the story works much better with them. But unfortunatelly the quality of those scenes isn't great and it distracts me a little (more than in the episode I). I also like you cut out Anakin's meltdown. It's just better when it's his dark secret.
The only part where the story felt illogical was the arrival of Anakin and Padmé to Geonosis. It looked like Dooku was expecting them which doesn't really make sense. I think some shots from the droid factory could be used to fill the hole (not the whole thing, just the capture). I personally like what OnlyYodaForgives did with this scene in his Neon Noir edit. But overall this edit is great. Good job!
Fantastic edit. Made what was for me the worst movie in the franchise actually watchable and entertaining. Thank you Hal for making such an enjoyable edit!