Overall, I’m a fan of this edit. However I do have some thoughts:
firstly, the switch from Padme going to bed to having Obi-Wan and Anakin running into the bar on Coruscant looking for the would-be assassin is way to abrupt. Without the assassination attempt or the chase scene, it makes the search for the maker’s of the dart confusing.
secondly, you need to decide on one scene that portrays Obi-Wan expressing his concerns to Yoda or Mace Windu on whether or not Anakin is ready for his first assignment. Because Mace Windu is present in both scenes, it makes Obi-Wan look like a broken record saying the same things twice.
it’s a pity for the deleted scenes, George Lucas didn’t add the final details of the CGI, but that is beyond your control. You made the transitions between those scenes very smooth.